I love this descriptive piece of writing by a student of mine (year 5), inspired by the image. Every now and then, she produces stunning descriptions which I ask her to collect in a special folder called "My Amazing Pieces". It sets the bench mark of what I know she is capable of. As she becomes more confident as a writer, she is able to add to this folder with greater frequency (not every piece makes it!). Notice her use of sensory language/visual imagery, personification and variety of sentence types. A few changes were made after discussion, but mainly it is in its original form.
